| " beneath the makeup and
behind the smile, i am just a girl
who wishes for the world." -
marilyn monroe. a quote from one of
the world's most remarkable
woman inspired me as a child to
look at the world as if it was
art.
fashion has been in my family for
ages, and now it is my time to live
out the legacy. ever since i can
remember, getting up every morning
just to go to my grandmother's
house was a dream come true. why
you ask? because to me, she is the
coco chanel of my hometown. i
remember i was five years old at
the time and i dressed up in her
high heels, long string of pearls,
the famous coco chanel "
little black dress " and an
overly large hat, just to be like
my grandmother. at that very
moment, i knew what i was put on
earth to do. five years old? you
may say there is no possible way,
but with having the greatest
passion for fashion merchandising
as me there is.
back in high school when all of my
friends went to the nice
beach's in the south, i was
the one who took the long flights
over to europe. one year my first
stop was paris, france and i made
my way with my mother to the
galerie lafayette. i had just
completed my second year in french,
and i communicated with the workers
at yves saint laurent about their
merchandise. i remember we were
coming out of the louvre, and off
to the most famous street in paris,
champs-elysses, we went. just
seeing the most high end fashion
brands you can name on one street
was almost breath taking, along
with having the most fascinating
scenery to go along with it. even
seeing the fashion in barcelona was
such a bliss to see, and since then
it was a fact that i was made to go
into fashion merchandising as a
career.
also in high school, i was always
the one who dressed the other girls
in the morning right before school.
basically every night i would be
demanded to stay the night at other
friend's houses and bring over
my wardrobe just to make everyone
look their best for that day at
school. even for school dances, we
always went to a gown shop in
pennsylvania and i was their
fashion stylist for the day. having
people look up to me and ask me
what looks best on them always
touched my heart, and all i really
want to do is to touch other
peoples lives. having someone go
from having low self-esteem to high
self-esteem has always been a rush
for me just because i made a
difference.
to me, fashion is to my passion as
art would be to van gogh. there is
never something too plain or too
extravagant to show one's true
ideas and expressions. in my mind,
that is what i see every time i go
to new york city, or to be exact,
bryant place. walking into the park
is like walking into a new world,
with seeing this years latest
trends, to the most unique ideas
someone could ever see. with that,
it has inspired me to put forth my
ideas on one's body.
in my family, being in the field of
fashion merchandising would never
be an option. my mom is a school
bus driver, and my dad owns his own
car business, and with that, i
would be the first in my family to
go to college. i was enrolled in
west virginia university for
orthodontics, but i only stayed one
night because it just did not feel
right to go to a school i did not
want to go to , and have a major i
was not interested in. i really
could not say what made me choose
to go into the profession of
dentistry, maybe for the money, or
maybe because it was a secure job,
but with fashion merchandising i am
willing to take the chance of not
having a secure job. the one thing
i do know is that if i am accepted
into the fashion institute of
technology, it would be my dream
come true, and the greatest honor
to attend such a classy and all
around great school as fit.
back in high school when all of my
friends went to the nice beach’s
in the south, i was the one who
took the long flights over to
europe. after i finished my second
year in french, i decided to take a
trip with my mother to paris,
france. little did i know, when she
and i went to the galerie lafayette
to visit the yves saint laurent
store, i was tempted to speak to
them in french but their english
was proficient. i remember we were
coming out of the louvre, and off
to the most famous street in paris,
champs-elysses, we went. just
seeing the most high end fashion
brands you can name on one street
was almost breath taking, along
with having the most fascinating
scenery to go along with it, but it
is paris what else could i expect?
umm.. honestly i dont know how to
work this thing, im going to repost
the essay that i just redone.
‘ beneath the makeup and behind
the smile, i am just a girl who
wishes for the world.” - marilyn
monroe. a quote from one of the
world’s most remarkable woman
inspired me as a child to look at
the world as if it was art.
fashion has always been an
important icon in my family. ever
since i can remember, getting up
every morning just to go to my
grandmother’s house was a dream
come true. why you ask? because to
me, she is the tammy apostol of my
hometown. i remember i was five
years old at the time and i dressed
up in her high heels, long string
of pearls, a “ little black dress
“ and an overly large hat, just
to be like my grandmother. at that
very moment, i knew what i was put
on earth to do. five years old? you
may say there is no possible way,
but with having the greatest
passion for fashion merchandising
as me there is.
Constructive criticism here...
1. Fashion has not been in your family (according to this letter) for ages. Your grandmother, I assume is working as the neighborhood seamstress but your mother does not appear to have the urge to go that direction. You should rephrase the opening statement. I can assure you every student at FIT has a seamstress in their family or were influenced by Coco Chanel. My advise... pick a relatively unknown designer that only those who truly UNDERSTAND fashion will recognize.
2. Basically every night I would be demanded to stay the night at other friend's houses and bring over my wardrobe just to make everyone look their best for that day at school. I think this statement is a vast exaggeration and you should rethink it. I mean EVERY night? EVERY?
3. Van Gogh was mentally unstable whose passions ran the gauntlet from women to the church to his art.
4. You conclude with, "such a classy and all around great school as FIT" I dislike this sentence. It sounds like you are begging and your choice of the word classy does not fit.
5. If everyone knows that fashion is your passion then why did you attend WVU? I would not even mention that school in my statement.
6. You said, "Even seeing the fashion in Barcelona was such a bliss to see" Spain is a wonderful artistic country with great designers have hailed from so you should not act surprised.
7. When you went to Paris and the YSL store you should know they speak English quite nicely. You can leave off the statement about speaking to them in French.
8. Just be yourself in the letter. It's not about legacies that don't exist or passions that don't correlate it is simply about why you think you should go to FIT. Like a piece to puzzle how do the two fit?
Love to read the final draft.
Additional info:
Much better I checked out Tammy Apostol website. I am impressed and I am sure the people at FIT would be too. Everyone knows who Coco Chanel is but only fashionistas know Tammy Apostol. |
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